读后续写专练1
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
In my twenties, I went far from home to study in America. Due to limited financial resources from my parents, I worked part-time on campus to pay for my bills. In addition, I did cleaning every Friday for an American family. If I was lucky enough,I could occasionally babysit a child for extra money.
Like most poor people, I had to be careful with every penny I spent,from food and clothing to rent and transportation. Because of a tight grocery budget, I couldn’t afford to buy fish, beef or certain other nutritious food. Due to an imbalanced diet, I would easily feel weak and listless. As soon as Dai Mom Mom realized that I was encountering financial hardship, she lovingly invited me to her home for dinner every Friday and weekend. In addition, whenever it was time to return home, she would always prepare me with some homemade dessert or food to take home. Her kind actions, like the seeds of love planted in my heart, profoundly changed my life. In particular, there was one event that I would always remember. One early evening, while I was walking out of the library, I felt my blood sugar running low. I started to feel dizzy, and my hands started to shake a little. Searching my pockets, I found that I only had a few dollars left. I was dying for a free and tasty dinner. Without a second thought,I quickly headed for Dai Mom Mom’s home, rather than go back to my apartment. As I got to the door, Dai Mom Mom immediately noticed my fatigue(疲劳). She seated me at the dining table, and before long,a plate of food was set in front of me on the table. “Have dinner. Don’t make yourself work so hard,’’ she said to me with a nice smile.
Staring at the meat, vegetables, and fish on my plate, I suddenly felt so pampered that tears started welling up inmy eyes, rolling down on my face, and dripping to the food on the plate. I gobbled up all the food with indescribablybitter-sweet feelings.
注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语; 3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好; 4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。 Paragraph 1 :
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To be specific, during that period of time, my extremely tight financial difficulties only allowed me $10 for my weekly groceries.
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Dai Mom Mom was an angel to be my guardian.
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写作思路
(1) 审时态:全文以一般过去时为主要时态讲述“我”在美国求学时的事情。 (2) 审人称:全文以第一人称为主,讲述作者的亲身经历。 (3) 审文章前六段讲述了哪些内容。 (4) 审续写首句对后文内容的影响。 思路点拨
文章给出的部分讲述了Dai Mrnn Mom对“我”的照顾,在“我”几乎昏倒时,“我”到了她家。她为“我”准备了丰盛的晚餐续写部分第一段要续写的是Dai Mom Mom端上饭菜后“我”当时感激、激动等复杂的心情:续写部分第二段是作者对此事产生的感悟:我们要紧紧围绕着 angel—词展开她的爱对“我”的影响:从身体上到精神上都产生了积极的作用。
高分揭秘
(1) 续写两部分的处理符合原作语气。
(2) 续写自然、流畅,使用f较多的过渡词,如so、not only…but also、not...but、in particular 等。
(3) 续写的讲述部分完整、全面,议论部分有感而发,使得全文自然形成一体。
(4) 续写使用了较多的高级词汇,如delicious、physical、 genuine、considerate、in need of等,以及高级句式,如that引导的定语从句和what引导的宾语从句等。
(5) 本题满分25分,本范文得24分。 参考范文 Paragraph 1 :
To be specific, during that period of time, my extremely tight financial difficulties only allowed me $10 for my weekly groceries. So, when the food was brought to me, it was just like a Christmas gift from Heaven ; to this day, I remember it as the best and most delicious dinner that I have ever had. Not only did the food satisfy my physical hunger, but also it deeply filled mv spirit with genuine love. I was deeply moved by her. Paragraph 2:
Dai Mom Mom was an angel to be my guardian. She came by my side, not for a day, not for a month, but for many years. She gave me the considerate love that a mother gave to her own child. She let me know what the true love is. How lucky I am! A small act of love can make a 第3页
greal difference. In particular, because of her, I have now become a person who can pass her love to others in need of help or support.
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读后续写专练2
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
It was an unusually quiet day in the emergency room on December 25.Quiet, that is, except for those who were standing around the nurses’ station complaining about having to work Christmas Day. I was triage nurse that day and had just been out to the waiting room to clean up. Just then five bodies showed up at my triage desk, a pale woman and four small children.
“Are you all sick？” I asked suspiciously. “Yes，” she said weakly and lowered her head.
But when it came to descriptions of their present problems, things got a little vague. Two of the children had headaches, but the headaches weren’ t accompanied by the normal body language of holding the head or trying to keep it still. Two children had earaches, but only one could tell me which ear was affected. The mother complained of a cough but seemed to work to produce it.
Something was wrong, but I didn’ t say anything. I explained to the mother that it might be a little while before a doctor saw her. She responded, “Take your time; it’ s warm in here.” She turned and, with a smile, guided her children into the waiting room.
On a hunch (call it nursing judgment), I checked the chart after the admitting clerk had finished registering the family. No address — they were homeless. The waiting room was warm. I looked out at the family huddled by the Christmas tree. The smallest one was pointing at the television and exclaiming something to her mother. The oldest one was looking at her reflection in a decoration on the Christmas tree.
I went back to the nurses’ station and mentioned we had a homeless family in the waiting room.The nurses, complaining about working Christmas, turned to compassion for a family just trying to get warm on Christmas. Then our team went into action, much as we do when there’ s a medical emergency. But this one was a Christmas emergency. A special Christmas party was to be held.
注意：
1．所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2．至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语； 3．续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好； 4．续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。 Paragraph 1：
We were all offered a free meal in the hospital cafeteria on Christmas Day,
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When the party ended, as the family walked to the door to leave,
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写作思路
(1)明确故事人物。
故事中主要人物为作者(护士)、护士站的护士们、无家可归的一家人(一位母亲和四个孩子)。
(2)理清故事主要事件。
作者(值班护士)遇到前来看病的一家人；作者发现这一家人无家可归，想以看病为由留在医院候诊室取暖；作者将此事告诉其他护士，护士们出于同情，决定帮助这一家人举行一个紧急而特殊的圣诞聚会。
(3)根据已知人物、事件及续写段落的开头语预测故事发展。
故事总体的发展可能是护士们在短时间内精心为这一家人准备圣诞聚会，这一家人度过了温暖而美好的圣诞节，并向医院的护士们表达他们的感激之情。续写第一段：护士们圣诞节这一天在医院可以领取免费餐，很可能他们用这个机会为聚会准备了食物。过圣诞节还需要准备礼物，可以写护士们如何想办法准备礼物。这一段主要描述护士们精心准备的过程。续写第二段：聚会结束，这一家人准备离开。这样的场合可以描写这一家人的感受和反应。他们内心一定是充满感激的，也一定会通过言语和行为表达这种感激之情。同时，可以考虑护士们的反应和感受，对照文章一开始的抱怨，护士们此刻的内心应该也是感动和幸福的。
(4)结合下划线词语罗列写作要点。
结合下划线词语和短文内容，展开尽可能丰富的想象，罗列出尽可能多的故事发展情节。例如，第一段可以通过提出以下问题来获取写作要点：
What did the nurses prepare for the Christmas party?
How did the nurses get what they needed for the party in such a short time? Where was the party held?
What did the family do in the party? Did they enjoy the party?
第二段可以通过提出以下问题来获取写作要点： How did the family feel after the party? What did they say to the nurses when they left? What did they do when they left?
How did the nurses feel when the family left?
Did they still complain about working on Christmas Day? 参考范文 Paragraph 1：
We were all offered a free meal in the hospital cafeteria on Christmas Day, so we asked for that meal and prepared a banquet for our Christmas guests. We also needed presents, so we put together
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candies, fruits and other things available from different apartments. Rushing in and out of the waiting room, our team made great efforts to make a warm party to meet the needs of the homeless family who just wanted to warm themselves on Christmas Day.
Paragraph 2：
When the party ended, as the family walked to the door to leave, the mother came running back, gave me a hug and whispered, “Thanks for being our angels today.” As she got back to her children, they all waved one more time. Inside the nurses’ station, there stood a group of nurses with tears of joy in their eyes, who worked a Christmas Day that they will never forget.
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